I really enjoy your opening paragraph. This opens up with a cool story that we are all familiar with, but seems like it will have a creative twist as it's told from the wolf's perspective- a classic villain in folklore.
I am really excited to read more from these villains! You have set up their side of the story nicely in this intro.
The layout of your website is great! I like that it's dark- it goes with the evil villain theme. The image you used is great, too, as it shows that Red is kinda apprehensive about the wolf, but you imply that there is more to the story.
One of my favorite quotes is that "no one is the villain of their own story" and this seems to fit that perfectly! I'm only familiar with a few of the bad guys you mention, so I am excited to read more about them and hear their side of the story!
Your storybook topic is very interesting, and I like how you took classic stories that most people have read and decided to shift the point of view to the villains. I also like how they all seem to be good friends who have been wrongly accused for things they didn’t actually do. I guess whoever tells their side of the story first (in this case Red Riding Hood or Hansel and Gretel) ends up being a “hero.”
I also like how you added the wolf’s thoughts on each story as well. Especially when he says that Rapunzel is “so dramatic.”
I don’t have much to to critique you on, since I think you did a great job on this, but I did notice a few spelling and grammatical errors. For example, in the first paragraph you say “big bad pigs”, and the comma is in the wrong place (it should be: “big bad pigs,”). You also say “there’s” in the first paragraph when it should be “theirs.”
Your intro gives the viewer just enough information to understand the story, but it also leaves you wanting to read more! I can’t wait to see more of your storybook!
The image of the wolf is perfect for your home page. It is bold and enticing. It really grabs my attention and makes me want to read your story. The dark layout and the crisp white text works well with the one intense yellow eye. In the first sentence of you intro, maybe you could find a way to make the wolf sound not as friendly? I feel like you could make the first words a little more creative when you go through your revisions. For my stories, I took the nontraditional side of the story as well. It is fun to work with them and create this whole other persona for something people usually don’t give more than a second thought. On a side note… I don’t thing “there’s” is the right word for their stories (“I’m also going to tell you there’s as well” should be their stories as well). Just a thought for snow white part…you could add more hate into your words to make him sound bitter. I like the Hansel and Gretel part. I can easily hear the voice of this narrative and see him shaking his head. I like how you said hunt because he’s a wolf. You shouldn’t depreciate the fact that you only have three stories! Maybe make it seem like there are more to come or something like that. Also, read over that first sentence in the last paragraph, I think there is a typo. So far so good though! I enjoyed reading this and I’m excited to read the stories that go along with them!
First, I like the layout of your blog, it is clean and well organized. I don't know if it was intentional, but I like how you used a black and white hand drawn picture in your introduction, it matches your color scheme and certainly fits in with a storybook vibe.
I like your idea to shake up some classic fairy tales, it leaves you with a lot of creative options. Have you ever read Grendel by John Gardner? It is sort of a similar idea to your storybook, maybe you can find some inspiration if you haven't read it already. I do like how it appears that Henry will guide the reader through each story, including his own. It sort of reminds me of the role of Virgil.
Thanks so much for sharing. I really enjoyed it. Good luck with finishing your storybook, hopefully I'll get it assigned again later this semester. Finally, good luck with the rest of the upcoming semester.
This is such a cool concept! I love that we get to hear from the villains' side of the story. It's a different way to do this project instead of just rewriting a story. I hope your creative juices are really flowing because you will be writing everything from scratch, I assume. I'll definitely have to check back to read your stories. I liked how you really knew what details you were going to include, even before the stories were written. I think that tells a lot about how you have planned this storybook. I would have enjoyed if you could have gone into more detail about each villain's story a little bit more, which I understand has to do because of the word count. I think you have a lot of creative freedom here and I enjoyed that one of the villains is the narrator. Giving names and some descriptions really sets up this storybook for some great writings.
I really enjoyed reading your storybook introduction. Your storybook is the one I chose as my extra commenting and I picked it because it already had me sucked in from the opening title. I thought the 2 pictures you used for your cover page and introduction page were super good choices and really helped you illustrate Henry as the narrator. I thought it was super creative for you to bring in those other 3 villains to tell their stories and I loved your introductions for each one. I especially liked your commentary in each one it was really funny. Overall I think you picked a great topic, I know me and other students will be very excited and interested to read about the villains side of the story.
I love that you are going to tell classic fairytales from the villains perspective. After all there are always two sides to every story. I thought the line about the dwarfs out numbering the evil queen, seven to one, making it impossible to get anyone to believe her side of the story was funny. You combined classic fairytales, humor, and intrigue together to create something new and exciting. The wolf cover page picture looks like he is staring right at the readers. It was the first thing that caught my attention. The only thing I thought might be nice to have modern pictures like the cover page picture throughout the book. It would be cool if you could find pictures that resembled the classic picture you used on your introduction but with a modern look. That would make your final project look like it was all cohesive. I cant wait to hear the other side to all my favorite fairytales.
Very impressive Welcome Page! The pair of wolf’s eyes really stands out! I don’t know you intend for the phrase in your Welcome Page. Is this phrase a title? If it is, you missed the capitalization of other words. I think it would be would cool if you make this phrase in a dialogue phrase from the big bad wolf like “The side you didn’t hear …” I like the topic of your storybook. It’s always nice to know the opposite side of the story. I really like the sentence “...we villains haven’t had the chance to tell our story…” This is so true. The story is different, depending on the author and his or her stand in the story. I like the tone you set up in the first paragraph. It makes the Big Bad Wolf seems like a casual guy, who complained on being accused of doing wrong while he is innocent. For the next few paragraphs, you showed a brief but great introduction to other stories that you are going to tell. You told who is defined as the villains, but they are victims of the protagonists in the original version. I want to ask for the next stories, not the one of the Big Bad Wolf, who will tell the stories? Is it the Big Bad Wolf or the main villain of those stories? I hope you will tell the stories in first person. It would be nice to know what the villain is thinking. I like the stories you chose for this project. All of these stories are very common fairy tales. I think almost everybody hear these stories in their childhood. It will be very interesting to know the stories in villain’s perspective. This reminds me of the Shrek movies, where the Prince Charming went to the villain bar and showed empathy to the villains.
Hey Toni, I am truly intrigued by your introduction paragraph.I think that taking the villain's side of every story is a great idea for a story book! I think that the aspect of seeing both sides of a story is always important. Reading stories I sometimes wonder how the other side of the story would go which makes me really excited about reading your story book. I know there are some stories out there that are similar to this but I can't wait to see what spin you put on each story. I like the fact that you have chosen a couple not so well know villains. I mean a lot of people would have chosen Maleficent or someone who always pops in your head as a villain. I personally didn't know the name of the witch from Hansel and Gretel. I look forward to seeing where the story goes!
I love this idea! I enjoyed reading the introduction but even more I enjoyed how you laid out exactly what you were going to write in the rest of your storybook. I can’t wait to see what the Villian’s side of the story is for these, even though I’m most familiar with Repunzel’s story. I enjoyed that the Wolf is telling the story, I wonder if he’s telling his story with both the three little pigs and little red riding hood, or just one? Everyone always says that history is written by the victors, it puts an interesting twist to see both sides of the story. Or what life would be like had the victors been reversed. I actually have a book that tries to show what it would have been like had the Allies never intervened in Nazi Germany’s conquering of Europe that started WWII. It’s an interesting concept to think about!
Your storybook really caught my attention. I think it will be really interesting to see how you will come up with these different stories to make them not be the villains’. Your introduction does a great job at telling us what to expect. I like how you first started with one character and then continued with explaining what other stories we should expect to read. I can’t wait to see how the other stories go, especially the Rapunzel story. In your first story, I thought it was fun to read how you incorporated two different stories together: the three little pigs and little red riding hood. It flows together really good because in both of those stories, there is a “big bad wolf.” In the story, you mention he “thought” the hunter was the friend that the pigs were talking about. I wonder if you elaborated on that and explain who it really was, then it would also be something fun to read. Overall, I think your storybook is great and I can’t wait to read the next stories!
Ah, I love the idea for this storybook so much. When my sister was younger, I always used to read her *The True Story of the Three Little Pigs* by Jon Scieszka, and that’s kind of what this reminds me of. It’s great that the wolf finally has a name, and that it turns out he’s the same guy from both Little Red Riding Hood and The Three Little Pigs. Henry’s voice is perfect for this, too.
Honestly, after reading the intro and the first story, I don’t have much to suggest, because this is already in great shape. You’ll probably want to go back and choose a consistent font for the storybook, because right now, there’s a different one for the introduction and the first story. There are also a few typos sprinkled throughout, and it looks like the first word of the first story is missing. But the story itself is brilliant. I’m a huge fan of how you’ve woven the two different tales into one cohesive account, and I totally buy that this is what happened, haha. I’m definitely looking forward to seeing what fresh spins you put on the rest of the stories, because I enjoyed this one a ton! Really nice job.
The idea that the the the “villains” aren’t actually bad guys is still really cool to me. It reminds me of that show Once Upon a Time actually! But anyway, I like how you wrote Henry as a character. I love the way he phrases things and his sense of humor. I also liked how you chose to combine the three little pigs story and little red riding hood. It’s cool to think that it was the same wolf in both stories!
One thing you might improve on though is adding more details. Maybe you could describe the setting or tell us about Henry’s appearance? I also wanted to know more of the backstory between all the characters. Like why does the wolf like Red and her grandmother, and are they friends? I also noticed that you say “there, it’s Henry” in the first sentence and it doesn’t really make sense. Maybe you meant to write “here?”
Can’t wait to read more of your storybook in the future!
I really love the premise of your story. Combining two simple stories, especially ones everyone knows so well, is a really good technique and I hope you apply it to your next stories as well. That being said, I would have liked it if the story was a bit longer. The idea is great but more details would have spiced it up, especially concerning descriptions of the pigs and hunter as well as their motivations. And you didn't really describe little red at all. A bit more about their interactions would be nice. I also think that the first couple of sentences should be redone. They don't quite fit the style of the rest of it. I know that you are going for casual and I think that's good but you might want to just change the introduction a bit. Maybe something along the lines of jumping right into how his life has been ruined/altered by being accused of crimes he hasn't committed rather than "hey guys." I do like the first person narrative though and I like how you've set up a theme of villians retelling their own stories from their points of view. It's kind of a classic take and I'd like to see what other stories you add to it.
Hi Toni, I really enjoyed reading both your introduction and your first story! The introduction really drew me in and made me excited to read the story! I love the concept of retelling the stories in the villains point of view. Especially when you retell them so that they are not the bad guys anymore! Your first story was very interesting to read. I like how you wove two stories together! Both the story and the introduction I think are excellent and don't really need a lot of work! In the story I saw a couple typos so just make sure to reread it and spell check it this week! Other than that I think you did a great job and I can't wait to read more of the stories that you write!
I really like the picture you chose at the very beginning it’s really in your face and makes sure you know what you’re about to get yourself into. The first part of your introduction seems a little discombobulated a little bit, I think the wording may be a little bit off. I can’t quite put my finger on it. I think that your naming of characters is on to different sides of the fence. You have Henry which is simple and normal for a werewolf then you have Queen Grimhilde which is very unique and more in tune to the fairy tale atmosphere you are trying to convey. I think by matching the fairytale names would really make it seem as if there isn’t a disconnect. I like the idea that you are focusing on the “not so good” characters make me really excited to see what kind of spin you are going to put on the fairytales and it will show a different perspective that we don’t often get in fairy tales. In the story of the wolf you tend to switch emotions rather quickly and it really makes the character seem a little all over the place. Pick one central emotion you want to convey and run with it, it will make the character seem more focused and distinctive. The combination of Red Riding Hood and Three Little Pigs was really clever I hope you do another story that you combine two characters! Good job : )
All I can say is, wow, you are SO creative! This adaptation requires a lot of imagination and you really nailed it. This is such a good angle and the characters, or villains rather, that you chose fit the bill perfectly. I also like the dark theme of your site, but wonder if maybe there is a more fitting template you could use? It just seems like this one might be a little too basic for the absolutely fascinating Storybook you're setting up here!!
I also really really love the photos you put in each story. They fit each story perfectly and add a nice touch.
I love this concept a lot because I love reading books that change vantage points. Like in one chapter it's from this character's point of view and in the next, it's from another. I think this technique really rounds out a story because it gives a lot of details that we wouldn't otherwise get.
Wow, I love this story so much! I wish I would have the creativeness to think of this. Your story about the big bad wolf was amazing. A wow moment for me was the wolf finding out the plan of the three pigs. I thought this was such a great moment. One thing I would love for you to add to this story would be some more dialogue between the characters. Overall I couldn't think of much more to add. This was a great original concept and I look forward to reading more of your villains side of the story.
In your story “ The Evil Queen,” I was really surprised that it was Snow white’s real mother that was the evil one. You really turned this story around. I think it’s interesting how you chose a character that no one would ever guess. I personally would have never guessed that it was Snow White’s real mother who was behind all of this. After reading this story, I would like to know why Snow White’s mother decided to kill her? I know she wanted to be queen badly, but that is her real daughter. I think it would be interesting if you added maybe Snow White’s father into this story as well. Adding the father into this story could probably add dimension and explain better as to why Snow White’s real mother was so angry. Did she feel betrayed by Snow White as well? Overall, I think is a great addition to your storybook!
I really think your storybook is probably one of the best I have seen so far. Everytime I get an extra comment I always come check yours to see how your storybook is coming a long, and it looks great. I really like your take on red riding hood and the big bad wolf. It was very humorous and was really developed well. It reminded me of that movie Hoodwinked, which is about the real story of red riding hood. I also thought your take on the evil queen was awesome. The way you turned the entire story around to where it was snow whites mother that was the evil one was great. Definitely would have liked to have the dwarfs in there but that would have been really hard. One of the best things about your stories are how well you developed each character in them. You show such a good innocent side of each character while keeping them true to the original story in their mannerisms. Anyways, it looks great and keep up the good work!
Your theme for your storybook is very interesting. Both the title and the image of the wolf on the cover page for your story really drew me in!
I think the topic you chose gives you a lot freedom to develop the personalities and backgrounds of these different "villains." I am curious how you will cast them in the light of good intentions though. I also think it would be quite comical if you decided to make the villains not recognize what they did was wrong either. Another cool direction to take this project is if at the end of your story book you dedicate a story to all the "villains" being cleared of their bad reputation and all the storyteller heroes going to prison or getting the punishment that they deserve.
Whatever direction you take with this I am really excited to read the outcome of your stories. I look forward to checking in on this project week after week.
First of all, I really love your landing page, especially the quote "the side you didn't hear." It already gives your storybook a kind of ominous vibe that really grabs my attention. I also think your theme is really cool - I thought about doing something similar myself, actually! I really like how the big bad wolf is the narrator of the introduction - he probably is the most well known, so I think that's really fitting. I like how casual he is throughout the introduction and the stories; it really does feel like he's just trying to explain things to a friend. That being said, I definitely still don't trust him, haha. I think the almost outrageous version of his own story really makes the storybook more interesting, because even though I'm not inclined to believe such strong accusations, I think it's appropriate that a big bad wolf may lie to attempt to fix his image. Anyway, whatever the wolf's intentions, I enjoyed the story nonetheless. Keep up the good work!
Toni, I just read the story about Snow White and the Evil Queen. I really loved it! That was so clever and creative of you to make Snow White's mom the real villain and not her step mom. It sounded totally legit and plausible that she used magic to fool everyone and kill her daughter. Fairy tales can be crazy like that. I would not be surprised if Disney asked to use that story. As a reader, it's like whenever I think I had the story figured out and what actually happened, there was another plot twist. I never got bored of the story or felt like it was not convincing. I thought your writing style was very good and your use of description, while communicating and furthering the plot, was excellent. Overall, you did a really fantastic job and I loved the story. I actually did feel bad for the villain.
I wasn't assigned your blog, but it caught my eye because I love superhero and super villain stories so I wanted to hear your twist on it. I like how in the intro you introduced the individual villains that you are going to write about. I think that draws in the reader more because you are straightforward. The way that you tied in the villain's side of the story to the real story was very impressive. It is hard to change a story's plot but still keeping some of the parts. The stories that you used to defend the alleged criminals were extremely believable and could have been the second side to the original story.
I have read your introduction before, and I already intrigued by your approach in telling the other side of the story. I think it would be a challenge to clarify that bad guys are not truly bad guys. After reading the story about the Big Bad Wolf, I think you did much better than I expected. You made a very big twist in the story, swapping heroes and bad guys. I also think you did well in combining two stories together and made your story flowed well. Your second story left me completely in awe. Your tone shifted completely from your first story, and the second story is more serious and mysterious. I have always assumed Snow White’s mother died, but your version threw me out of space. It is so amazing!!! I love your twist in the story, turning Snow White’s mother into a greed person who killed her own child for power. Very tragic story I have to say. I felt bad for the Evil Queen. Now, I wish you will write a sequel on this story about exposing the Snow White’s mother. You did very well! I don’t see anywhere need improvement. Keep up your good work!
I'm glad I get to keep up with your Story book because I think it's one of my favorites in the class! I just love this concept and couldn't wait to read who you picked as your next villain.
Wowee, I love your creativity and imagination! I think you did a really excellent job of coming up with an entirely fresh perspective on a time-old tale. I especially liked the idea of the different colored eyes between Snow White and her mother. That was a really cool way to find out what had really happened!
There's one line, "Little do they know that their beloved Snow White is really a murderer," that gave me some pause. It took me a couple of times reading through the second half of your story to figure out what you meant here. Maybe a simple rephrasing would help? I imagine you're trying to convey that the one that everyone THINKS is Snow White is actually her mother, a murderer. At first I was like, "Wait, when did Snow White kill someone?" Lol, that is seriously the ONLY critique I had, because this story was so so great. Bravo! Keep up the good work :)
Hi Toni! I really enjoyed your story. Even the opening picture caught my attention almost immediately. I think you did a really good job coming up with an idea that flows well with the theme of the original source. This was a really good read and I was entertained the entire time. One critique I would have would be just a little rephrasing here and there to make the flow of the story go a little more smoothly. Other than that, this was an awesome read and I cannot wait to read more!
I really enjoyed the theme of your story! This "bad kids club" was a fun twist on the classic idea of a villain! I really like that you showed the villain's side and how they can be misunderstood!
Your storybook had a nice flow to it. The fact that you broke the stories up by character was a great way to keep it interesting and clear about who you were talking about! Since Henry was the main character of your introduction, I like how you had him introduce each character! It was a nice way to tie your stories together.
One thing I would love to see more of in your writing is more dialogue between characters! I feel like the dialogue between the evil queen and Snow White would be interesting and it would help give more depth to the characters.
Overall, great story! This is one of my favorite projects I have read so far and I look forward to reading how you wrap it up! Great job!!
Toni, your storybook idea is so creative. I chose to do the portfolio option and I am always so impressed with how creative each person’s theme is when I read the storybooks. I like that you chose to take on the role of defending the “bad guys” in each story. I also like that you combined two famous fairy tale stories into one (referring to the one about the big bad wolf). I also like that you chose to write about Hansel and Gretel. I read a story similar to this famous tale in this week’s English Fairy Tale section. I think your writing is comical and also detailed and informative. I was never confused or lost, which can easily be done when combining stories together. Although I’m not sure it was your intention, I also think your theme serves a good reminder for all of those reading. It is important to always look at both sides of a story before making quick judgments.
Hi Toni, I really loved the theme of your storybook! It was so creative and was nothing I would have ever thought to do! The execution was even better! I thought that all three of your stories were very well written and really gave the reader the villain's side of the story. Your introduction was perfect! It gave the reader just enough of a peek into your stories so that they wanted to read it but no enough so you gave away key events in your story! Great job!
Hey Toni! I remembered reading your storybook earlier in the semester, so I definitely wanted to check back for this project feedback assignment. I love the concept and I ended up really enjoying the story of Hansel and Gretel. After reading a story from the witch's side, I felt bad for her. She was trying to do a good thing and the children did not understand that. It is true that kids have a mind of their own. I think it's funny that we read these stories to children and then get upset when they misbehave. However, it is good for them to know to get out of situations that make them fear for their lives. I think you did a great job explaining the story and it made sense from her side. The description was great and I could totally imagine the cottage. I love all these stories about cottages in the snow because of the upcoming holiday season. I think you chose really awesome villains for your storybook and their sides of the story were really strong. It made the hero or heroin of the original stories look like villains. How the tides change!
You have one of the most interesting storybooks I have seen this semester! I really love the idea and you’re doing a terrific job at telling the stories. They are all filled with so much detail. It makes it really enjoyable to read! I have thought of all three of these characters as bad guys for so long! It was refreshing to read something so enjoyable and so creative. I like that in your introduction you gave a small summary of what is going to happen in each! It all flows together really well, too. I can’t wait to see your last story and how it ties in with all of the other ones. Great job!
I thought you did a great job with the introduction! I have never really thought of the villain's side, so this was definitely an intriguing topic! The image was a great touch as well. The introduction wasn't too long, but it gave good information about what to expect from each story. I also liked that you told it from the wolf's perspective and had him be the leader of the villain's pack. It was like he was their advocate, which I thought was really cool.
I like how you start off your story with a joke. Having the big bad wolf question how big people think his stomach is was definitely a good ice breaker. It helps start the process of making him seem less mean. I also really enjoyed that you combined the story of the three little pigs and the story of little red riding hood. You did a great job of connecting them, it was seamless. They flowed together way and made Henry's story very believable. I didn't see anything that needed changing at all. You did a great job with the other stories as well, I didn't see any errors. I wanted to give you more feedback on your first story though because it was my favorite! Good job!
I love your idea for your storybook, peering into what the villain's perspective is such a fun idea. I chose to do something akin to this and I am always impressed and learn a lot from other people's take on the same creative technique. I can imagine the difficult time you had defending the "bad guy's" side since you only have the original story to go off of but you pulled it off! In addition to that, I also like that you combined two famous fairy tale stories into one and that you chose to write about Hansel and Gretel (two of my personal favorites)!
As for your writing, I was overall really impressed. I think your strengths lie in the high level of detail as well as your ability to write comedy well. A nod to your great writing was in the fact that I was never confused or lost, which can easily be done when combining stories together. Funnily enough, I think you followed the authors of the original and gave the readers a lesson to learn in the form of a reminder to always keep one's perspective in check. I really enjoyed your storybook overall and I cannot wait to read the conclusion!
Hi Toni, I really liked your storybook as it is set very clearly and has a perfect background, your choice of the dark colors makes it even more intriguing and definitely adds a lot of mystery to your story. I really like your introduction as it makes a good introduction to all of your stories making everything look clear. Moreover, I really like your choice of picking villains that I really have never heard of, it definitely keeps us wondering to what is really going to happen in your story. I have heard of the story of Hansel and Gretel but I have never read it. Furthermore, I really enjoyed how you were able to combine classic fairy tales with some humor, it definitely makes everything very original. Overall, I think you did a great job in all of your stories. I look forward to your future posts.
I was very excited to come back to your Story Book! I was wondering what other character you would write about and you certainly did not disappoint. This was a great choice of villain: the classic witch story.
I felt so bad for this witch by the end, though! I mean, why would anyone be so rude to a little old lady?! I thought this was a really good way to play on the old lady persona. She's old, so she can't see that well; she's old, so she is always welcoming to young children and prepares food for them. It's adorable!
Still, the ending is quite sad. She's just a lonely old woman, after all. And you really did an expert job of conveying that to the readers. I was so so sympathetic to her plight, and that's all because of your writing style! I'm so happy I came back to read your final story. Great job!
I enjoyed reading these quite a bit. Each of them was given a fun, clever twist. I also enjoyed the humor that you incorporated, like when the wolf wonders how big people think his stomach is that he would eat so much. I also really liked that you made the three pigs the bad guys. It seems fitting somehow. In fact, along those lines I appreciate the fact that, while you made the three pigs and the hunter bad guys, for the most part you didn’t make good characters bad. Snow White was still a victim, and the kids were bratty and horrid but not evil, and Red was innocent. I liked that that’s how you chose to rewrite the stories. The Snow White tale did a good job of pulling at my heartstrings and making me sad ☹. So did Hansel and Gretel. I have only one suggestion. At the beginning of the first story you introduce yourself even though you introduced yourself in the introduction. You don’t really need to do that. Great job, overall! I liked it:).
It's so interesting to see the villains of the fairy tales get a platform to tell their sides of the story. Adaptations of fairy tales that modernize the stories aren't uncommon, but what is uncommon is providing the villains' perspectives. We seem to take for granted the idea that the big bad wolf is, well, big and bad. I also like how you combined the different stories. The three little pigs are part of the reason why the hunter goes to Red's grandmother's house. I honestly didn't find much to critique. I think the writing style was great in that it really felt as though the wolf and the "witch" were speaking. Your chapters make it easy to imagine what they must be going through. Overall, I think you have a very strong storybook. It could easily be turned into an actual children's book.
Hi, Toni!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy your opening paragraph. This opens up with a cool story that we are all familiar with, but seems like it will have a creative twist as it's told from the wolf's perspective- a classic villain in folklore.
I am really excited to read more from these villains! You have set up their side of the story nicely in this intro.
The layout of your website is great! I like that it's dark- it goes with the evil villain theme. The image you used is great, too, as it shows that Red is kinda apprehensive about the wolf, but you imply that there is more to the story.
One of my favorite quotes is that "no one is the villain of their own story" and this seems to fit that perfectly!
I'm only familiar with a few of the bad guys you mention, so I am excited to read more about them and hear their side of the story!
Emily
Your storybook topic is very interesting, and I like how you took classic stories that most people have read and decided to shift the point of view to the villains. I also like how they all seem to be good friends who have been wrongly accused for things they didn’t actually do. I guess whoever tells their side of the story first (in this case Red Riding Hood or Hansel and Gretel) ends up being a “hero.”
ReplyDeleteI also like how you added the wolf’s thoughts on each story as well. Especially when he says that Rapunzel is “so dramatic.”
I don’t have much to to critique you on, since I think you did a great job on this, but I did notice a few spelling and grammatical errors. For example, in the first paragraph you say “big bad pigs”, and the comma is in the wrong place (it should be: “big bad pigs,”). You also say “there’s” in the first paragraph when it should be “theirs.”
Your intro gives the viewer just enough information to understand the story, but it also leaves you wanting to read more! I can’t wait to see more of your storybook!
The image of the wolf is perfect for your home page. It is bold and enticing. It really grabs my attention and makes me want to read your story. The dark layout and the crisp white text works well with the one intense yellow eye.
ReplyDeleteIn the first sentence of you intro, maybe you could find a way to make the wolf sound not as friendly? I feel like you could make the first words a little more creative when you go through your revisions.
For my stories, I took the nontraditional side of the story as well. It is fun to work with them and create this whole other persona for something people usually don’t give more than a second thought. On a side note… I don’t thing “there’s” is the right word for their stories (“I’m also going to tell you there’s as well” should be their stories as well).
Just a thought for snow white part…you could add more hate into your words to make him sound bitter. I like the Hansel and Gretel part. I can easily hear the voice of this narrative and see him shaking his head. I like how you said hunt because he’s a wolf.
You shouldn’t depreciate the fact that you only have three stories! Maybe make it seem like there are more to come or something like that. Also, read over that first sentence in the last paragraph, I think there is a typo. So far so good though! I enjoyed reading this and I’m excited to read the stories that go along with them!
Toni,
ReplyDeleteFirst, I like the layout of your blog, it is clean and well organized. I don't know if it was intentional, but I like how you used a black and white hand drawn picture in your introduction, it matches your color scheme and certainly fits in with a storybook vibe.
I like your idea to shake up some classic fairy tales, it leaves you with a lot of creative options. Have you ever read Grendel by John Gardner? It is sort of a similar idea to your storybook, maybe you can find some inspiration if you haven't read it already. I do like how it appears that Henry will guide the reader through each story, including his own. It sort of reminds me of the role of Virgil.
Thanks so much for sharing. I really enjoyed it. Good luck with finishing your storybook, hopefully I'll get it assigned again later this semester. Finally, good luck with the rest of the upcoming semester.
Andrew
This is such a cool concept! I love that we get to hear from the villains' side of the story. It's a different way to do this project instead of just rewriting a story. I hope your creative juices are really flowing because you will be writing everything from scratch, I assume. I'll definitely have to check back to read your stories. I liked how you really knew what details you were going to include, even before the stories were written. I think that tells a lot about how you have planned this storybook. I would have enjoyed if you could have gone into more detail about each villain's story a little bit more, which I understand has to do because of the word count. I think you have a lot of creative freedom here and I enjoyed that one of the villains is the narrator. Giving names and some descriptions really sets up this storybook for some great writings.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your storybook introduction. Your storybook is the one I chose as my extra commenting and I picked it because it already had me sucked in from the opening title. I thought the 2 pictures you used for your cover page and introduction page were super good choices and really helped you illustrate Henry as the narrator. I thought it was super creative for you to bring in those other 3 villains to tell their stories and I loved your introductions for each one. I especially liked your commentary in each one it was really funny. Overall I think you picked a great topic, I know me and other students will be very excited and interested to read about the villains side of the story.
I love that you are going to tell classic fairytales from the villains perspective. After all there are always two sides to every story. I thought the line about the dwarfs out numbering the evil queen, seven to one, making it impossible to get anyone to believe her side of the story was funny. You combined classic fairytales, humor, and intrigue together to create something new and exciting. The wolf cover page picture looks like he is staring right at the readers. It was the first thing that caught my attention. The only thing I thought might be nice to have modern pictures like the cover page picture throughout the book. It would be cool if you could find pictures that resembled the classic picture you used on your introduction but with a modern look. That would make your final project look like it was all cohesive. I cant wait to hear the other side to all my favorite fairytales.
ReplyDeleteVery impressive Welcome Page! The pair of wolf’s eyes really stands out! I don’t know you intend for the phrase in your Welcome Page. Is this phrase a title? If it is, you missed the capitalization of other words. I think it would be would cool if you make this phrase in a dialogue phrase from the big bad wolf like “The side you didn’t hear …”
ReplyDeleteI like the topic of your storybook. It’s always nice to know the opposite side of the story. I really like the sentence “...we villains haven’t had the chance to tell our story…” This is so true. The story is different, depending on the author and his or her stand in the story. I like the tone you set up in the first paragraph. It makes the Big Bad Wolf seems like a casual guy, who complained on being accused of doing wrong while he is innocent.
For the next few paragraphs, you showed a brief but great introduction to other stories that you are going to tell. You told who is defined as the villains, but they are victims of the protagonists in the original version. I want to ask for the next stories, not the one of the Big Bad Wolf, who will tell the stories? Is it the Big Bad Wolf or the main villain of those stories? I hope you will tell the stories in first person. It would be nice to know what the villain is thinking.
I like the stories you chose for this project. All of these stories are very common fairy tales. I think almost everybody hear these stories in their childhood. It will be very interesting to know the stories in villain’s perspective. This reminds me of the Shrek movies, where the Prince Charming went to the villain bar and showed empathy to the villains.
Hey Toni,
ReplyDeleteI am truly intrigued by your introduction paragraph.I think that taking the villain's side of every story is a great idea for a story book! I think that the aspect of seeing both sides of a story is always important. Reading stories I sometimes wonder how the other side of the story would go which makes me really excited about reading your story book. I know there are some stories out there that are similar to this but I can't wait to see what spin you put on each story. I like the fact that you have chosen a couple not so well know villains. I mean a lot of people would have chosen Maleficent or someone who always pops in your head as a villain. I personally didn't know the name of the witch from Hansel and Gretel. I look forward to seeing where the story goes!
I love this idea! I enjoyed reading the introduction but even more I enjoyed how you laid out exactly what you were going to write in the rest of your storybook. I can’t wait to see what the Villian’s side of the story is for these, even though I’m most familiar with Repunzel’s story. I enjoyed that the Wolf is telling the story, I wonder if he’s telling his story with both the three little pigs and little red riding hood, or just one? Everyone always says that history is written by the victors, it puts an interesting twist to see both sides of the story. Or what life would be like had the victors been reversed. I actually have a book that tries to show what it would have been like had the Allies never intervened in Nazi Germany’s conquering of Europe that started WWII. It’s an interesting concept to think about!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook really caught my attention. I think it will be really interesting to see how you will come up with these different stories to make them not be the villains’. Your introduction does a great job at telling us what to expect. I like how you first started with one character and then continued with explaining what other stories we should expect to read. I can’t wait to see how the other stories go, especially the Rapunzel story.
ReplyDeleteIn your first story, I thought it was fun to read how you incorporated two different stories together: the three little pigs and little red riding hood. It flows together really good because in both of those stories, there is a “big bad wolf.”
In the story, you mention he “thought” the hunter was the friend that the pigs were talking about. I wonder if you elaborated on that and explain who it really was, then it would also be something fun to read.
Overall, I think your storybook is great and I can’t wait to read the next stories!
Ah, I love the idea for this storybook so much. When my sister was younger, I always used to read her *The True Story of the Three Little Pigs* by Jon Scieszka, and that’s kind of what this reminds me of. It’s great that the wolf finally has a name, and that it turns out he’s the same guy from both Little Red Riding Hood and The Three Little Pigs. Henry’s voice is perfect for this, too.
ReplyDeleteHonestly, after reading the intro and the first story, I don’t have much to suggest, because this is already in great shape. You’ll probably want to go back and choose a consistent font for the storybook, because right now, there’s a different one for the introduction and the first story. There are also a few typos sprinkled throughout, and it looks like the first word of the first story is missing. But the story itself is brilliant. I’m a huge fan of how you’ve woven the two different tales into one cohesive account, and I totally buy that this is what happened, haha. I’m definitely looking forward to seeing what fresh spins you put on the rest of the stories, because I enjoyed this one a ton! Really nice job.
The idea that the the the “villains” aren’t actually bad guys is still really cool to me. It reminds me of that show Once Upon a Time actually! But anyway, I like how you wrote Henry as a character. I love the way he phrases things and his sense of humor. I also liked how you chose to combine the three little pigs story and little red riding hood. It’s cool to think that it was the same wolf in both stories!
ReplyDeleteOne thing you might improve on though is adding more details. Maybe you could describe the setting or tell us about Henry’s appearance? I also wanted to know more of the backstory between all the characters. Like why does the wolf like Red and her grandmother, and are they friends? I also noticed that you say “there, it’s Henry” in the first sentence and it doesn’t really make sense. Maybe you meant to write “here?”
Can’t wait to read more of your storybook in the future!
I really love the premise of your story. Combining two simple stories, especially ones everyone knows so well, is a really good technique and I hope you apply it to your next stories as well. That being said, I would have liked it if the story was a bit longer. The idea is great but more details would have spiced it up, especially concerning descriptions of the pigs and hunter as well as their motivations. And you didn't really describe little red at all. A bit more about their interactions would be nice.
ReplyDeleteI also think that the first couple of sentences should be redone. They don't quite fit the style of the rest of it. I know that you are going for casual and I think that's good but you might want to just change the introduction a bit. Maybe something along the lines of jumping right into how his life has been ruined/altered by being accused of crimes he hasn't committed rather than "hey guys."
I do like the first person narrative though and I like how you've set up a theme of villians retelling their own stories from their points of view. It's kind of a classic take and I'd like to see what other stories you add to it.
Hi Toni,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading both your introduction and your first story! The introduction really drew me in and made me excited to read the story! I love the concept of retelling the stories in the villains point of view. Especially when you retell them so that they are not the bad guys anymore! Your first story was very interesting to read. I like how you wove two stories together! Both the story and the introduction I think are excellent and don't really need a lot of work! In the story I saw a couple typos so just make sure to reread it and spell check it this week! Other than that I think you did a great job and I can't wait to read more of the stories that you write!
I really like the picture you chose at the very beginning it’s really in your face and makes sure you know what you’re about to get yourself into. The first part of your introduction seems a little discombobulated a little bit, I think the wording may be a little bit off. I can’t quite put my finger on it. I think that your naming of characters is on to different sides of the fence. You have Henry which is simple and normal for a werewolf then you have Queen Grimhilde which is very unique and more in tune to the fairy tale atmosphere you are trying to convey. I think by matching the fairytale names would really make it seem as if there isn’t a disconnect.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea that you are focusing on the “not so good” characters make me really excited to see what kind of spin you are going to put on the fairytales and it will show a different perspective that we don’t often get in fairy tales. In the story of the wolf you tend to switch emotions rather quickly and it really makes the character seem a little all over the place. Pick one central emotion you want to convey and run with it, it will make the character seem more focused and distinctive.
The combination of Red Riding Hood and Three Little Pigs was really clever I hope you do another story that you combine two characters! Good job : )
All I can say is, wow, you are SO creative! This adaptation requires a lot of imagination and you really nailed it. This is such a good angle and the characters, or villains rather, that you chose fit the bill perfectly. I also like the dark theme of your site, but wonder if maybe there is a more fitting template you could use? It just seems like this one might be a little too basic for the absolutely fascinating Storybook you're setting up here!!
ReplyDeleteI also really really love the photos you put in each story. They fit each story perfectly and add a nice touch.
I love this concept a lot because I love reading books that change vantage points. Like in one chapter it's from this character's point of view and in the next, it's from another. I think this technique really rounds out a story because it gives a lot of details that we wouldn't otherwise get.
Wow, I love this story so much! I wish I would have the creativeness to think of this. Your story about the big bad wolf was amazing. A wow moment for me was the wolf finding out the plan of the three pigs. I thought this was such a great moment. One thing I would love for you to add to this story would be some more dialogue between the characters. Overall I couldn't think of much more to add. This was a great original concept and I look forward to reading more of your villains side of the story.
ReplyDeleteIn your story “ The Evil Queen,” I was really surprised that it was Snow white’s real mother that was the evil one. You really turned this story around. I think it’s interesting how you chose a character that no one would ever guess. I personally would have never guessed that it was Snow White’s real mother who was behind all of this. After reading this story, I would like to know why Snow White’s mother decided to kill her? I know she wanted to be queen badly, but that is her real daughter. I think it would be interesting if you added maybe Snow White’s father into this story as well. Adding the father into this story could probably add dimension and explain better as to why Snow White’s real mother was so angry. Did she feel betrayed by Snow White as well?
ReplyDeleteOverall, I think is a great addition to your storybook!
Toni,
ReplyDeleteI really think your storybook is probably one of the best I have seen so far. Everytime I get an extra comment I always come check yours to see how your storybook is coming a long, and it looks great. I really like your take on red riding hood and the big bad wolf. It was very humorous and was really developed well. It reminded me of that movie Hoodwinked, which is about the real story of red riding hood. I also thought your take on the evil queen was awesome. The way you turned the entire story around to where it was snow whites mother that was the evil one was great. Definitely would have liked to have the dwarfs in there but that would have been really hard. One of the best things about your stories are how well you developed each character in them. You show such a good innocent side of each character while keeping them true to the original story in their mannerisms. Anyways, it looks great and keep up the good work!
Toni,
ReplyDeleteYour theme for your storybook is very interesting. Both the title and the image of the wolf on the cover page for your story really drew me in!
I think the topic you chose gives you a lot freedom to develop the personalities and backgrounds of these different "villains." I am curious how you will cast them in the light of good intentions though. I also think it would be quite comical if you decided to make the villains not recognize what they did was wrong either. Another cool direction to take this project is if at the end of your story book you dedicate a story to all the "villains" being cleared of their bad reputation and all the storyteller heroes going to prison or getting the punishment that they deserve.
Whatever direction you take with this I am really excited to read the outcome of your stories. I look forward to checking in on this project week after week.
Toni,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I really love your landing page, especially the quote "the side you didn't hear." It already gives your storybook a kind of ominous vibe that really grabs my attention. I also think your theme is really cool - I thought about doing something similar myself, actually! I really like how the big bad wolf is the narrator of the introduction - he probably is the most well known, so I think that's really fitting. I like how casual he is throughout the introduction and the stories; it really does feel like he's just trying to explain things to a friend. That being said, I definitely still don't trust him, haha. I think the almost outrageous version of his own story really makes the storybook more interesting, because even though I'm not inclined to believe such strong accusations, I think it's appropriate that a big bad wolf may lie to attempt to fix his image. Anyway, whatever the wolf's intentions, I enjoyed the story nonetheless. Keep up the good work!
Toni, I just read the story about Snow White and the Evil Queen. I really loved it! That was so clever and creative of you to make Snow White's mom the real villain and not her step mom. It sounded totally legit and plausible that she used magic to fool everyone and kill her daughter. Fairy tales can be crazy like that. I would not be surprised if Disney asked to use that story. As a reader, it's like whenever I think I had the story figured out and what actually happened, there was another plot twist. I never got bored of the story or felt like it was not convincing. I thought your writing style was very good and your use of description, while communicating and furthering the plot, was excellent. Overall, you did a really fantastic job and I loved the story. I actually did feel bad for the villain.
ReplyDeleteToni,
ReplyDeleteI wasn't assigned your blog, but it caught my eye because I love superhero and super villain stories so I wanted to hear your twist on it. I like how in the intro you introduced the individual villains that you are going to write about. I think that draws in the reader more because you are straightforward. The way that you tied in the villain's side of the story to the real story was very impressive. It is hard to change a story's plot but still keeping some of the parts. The stories that you used to defend the alleged criminals were extremely believable and could have been the second side to the original story.
I have read your introduction before, and I already intrigued by your approach in telling the other side of the story. I think it would be a challenge to clarify that bad guys are not truly bad guys. After reading the story about the Big Bad Wolf, I think you did much better than I expected. You made a very big twist in the story, swapping heroes and bad guys. I also think you did well in combining two stories together and made your story flowed well. Your second story left me completely in awe. Your tone shifted completely from your first story, and the second story is more serious and mysterious. I have always assumed Snow White’s mother died, but your version threw me out of space. It is so amazing!!! I love your twist in the story, turning Snow White’s mother into a greed person who killed her own child for power. Very tragic story I have to say. I felt bad for the Evil Queen. Now, I wish you will write a sequel on this story about exposing the Snow White’s mother. You did very well! I don’t see anywhere need improvement. Keep up your good work!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I get to keep up with your Story book because I think it's one of my favorites in the class! I just love this concept and couldn't wait to read who you picked as your next villain.
ReplyDeleteWowee, I love your creativity and imagination! I think you did a really excellent job of coming up with an entirely fresh perspective on a time-old tale. I especially liked the idea of the different colored eyes between Snow White and her mother. That was a really cool way to find out what had really happened!
There's one line, "Little do they know that their beloved Snow White is really a murderer," that gave me some pause. It took me a couple of times reading through the second half of your story to figure out what you meant here. Maybe a simple rephrasing would help? I imagine you're trying to convey that the one that everyone THINKS is Snow White is actually her mother, a murderer. At first I was like, "Wait, when did Snow White kill someone?" Lol, that is seriously the ONLY critique I had, because this story was so so great. Bravo! Keep up the good work :)
Hi Toni!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story. Even the opening picture caught my attention almost immediately. I think you did a really good job coming up with an idea that flows well with the theme of the original source. This was a really good read and I was entertained the entire time. One critique I would have would be just a little rephrasing here and there to make the flow of the story go a little more smoothly. Other than that, this was an awesome read and I cannot wait to read more!
I really enjoyed the theme of your story! This "bad kids club" was a fun twist on the classic idea of a villain! I really like that you showed the villain's side and how they can be misunderstood!
ReplyDeleteYour storybook had a nice flow to it. The fact that you broke the stories up by character was a great way to keep it interesting and clear about who you were talking about! Since Henry was the main character of your introduction, I like how you had him introduce each character! It was a nice way to tie your stories together.
One thing I would love to see more of in your writing is more dialogue between characters! I feel like the dialogue between the evil queen and Snow White would be interesting and it would help give more depth to the characters.
Overall, great story! This is one of my favorite projects I have read so far and I look forward to reading how you wrap it up! Great job!!
Toni, your storybook idea is so creative. I chose to do the portfolio option and I am always so impressed with how creative each person’s theme is when I read the storybooks. I like that you chose to take on the role of defending the “bad guys” in each story. I also like that you combined two famous fairy tale stories into one (referring to the one about the big bad wolf). I also like that you chose to write about Hansel and Gretel. I read a story similar to this famous tale in this week’s English Fairy Tale section. I think your writing is comical and also detailed and informative. I was never confused or lost, which can easily be done when combining stories together. Although I’m not sure it was your intention, I also think your theme serves a good reminder for all of those reading. It is important to always look at both sides of a story before making quick judgments.
ReplyDeleteHi Toni,
ReplyDeleteI really loved the theme of your storybook! It was so creative and was nothing I would have ever thought to do! The execution was even better! I thought that all three of your stories were very well written and really gave the reader the villain's side of the story. Your introduction was perfect! It gave the reader just enough of a peek into your stories so that they wanted to read it but no enough so you gave away key events in your story! Great job!
Hey Toni! I remembered reading your storybook earlier in the semester, so I definitely wanted to check back for this project feedback assignment. I love the concept and I ended up really enjoying the story of Hansel and Gretel. After reading a story from the witch's side, I felt bad for her. She was trying to do a good thing and the children did not understand that. It is true that kids have a mind of their own. I think it's funny that we read these stories to children and then get upset when they misbehave. However, it is good for them to know to get out of situations that make them fear for their lives. I think you did a great job explaining the story and it made sense from her side. The description was great and I could totally imagine the cottage. I love all these stories about cottages in the snow because of the upcoming holiday season. I think you chose really awesome villains for your storybook and their sides of the story were really strong. It made the hero or heroin of the original stories look like villains. How the tides change!
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ReplyDeleteYou have one of the most interesting storybooks I have seen this semester! I really love the idea and you’re doing a terrific job at telling the stories. They are all filled with so much detail. It makes it really enjoyable to read! I have thought of all three of these characters as bad guys for so long! It was refreshing to read something so enjoyable and so creative. I like that in your introduction you gave a small summary of what is going to happen in each! It all flows together really well, too. I can’t wait to see your last story and how it ties in with all of the other ones. Great job!
I thought you did a great job with the introduction! I have never really thought of the villain's side, so this was definitely an intriguing topic! The image was a great touch as well. The introduction wasn't too long, but it gave good information about what to expect from each story. I also liked that you told it from the wolf's perspective and had him be the leader of the villain's pack. It was like he was their advocate, which I thought was really cool.
ReplyDeleteI like how you start off your story with a joke. Having the big bad wolf question how big people think his stomach is was definitely a good ice breaker. It helps start the process of making him seem less mean. I also really enjoyed that you combined the story of the three little pigs and the story of little red riding hood. You did a great job of connecting them, it was seamless. They flowed together way and made Henry's story very believable. I didn't see anything that needed changing at all. You did a great job with the other stories as well, I didn't see any errors. I wanted to give you more feedback on your first story though because it was my favorite! Good job!
Hi Toni,
ReplyDeleteI love your idea for your storybook, peering into what the villain's perspective is such a fun idea. I chose to do something akin to this and I am always impressed and learn a lot from other people's take on the same creative technique. I can imagine the difficult time you had defending the "bad guy's" side since you only have the original story to go off of but you pulled it off! In addition to that, I also like that you combined two famous fairy tale stories into one and that you chose to write about Hansel and Gretel (two of my personal favorites)!
As for your writing, I was overall really impressed. I think your strengths lie in the high level of detail as well as your ability to write comedy well. A nod to your great writing was in the fact that I was never confused or lost, which can easily be done when combining stories together. Funnily enough, I think you followed the authors of the original and gave the readers a lesson to learn in the form of a reminder to always keep one's perspective in check. I really enjoyed your storybook overall and I cannot wait to read the conclusion!
Belle
Hi Toni,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your storybook as it is set very clearly and has a perfect background, your choice of the dark colors makes it even more intriguing and definitely adds a lot of mystery to your story. I really like your introduction as it makes a good introduction to all of your stories making everything look clear. Moreover, I really like your choice of picking villains that I really have never heard of, it definitely keeps us wondering to what is really going to happen in your story. I have heard of the story of Hansel and Gretel but I have never read it. Furthermore, I really enjoyed how you were able to combine classic fairy tales with some humor, it definitely makes everything very original. Overall, I think you did a great job in all of your stories. I look forward to your future posts.
I was very excited to come back to your Story Book! I was wondering what other character you would write about and you certainly did not disappoint. This was a great choice of villain: the classic witch story.
ReplyDeleteI felt so bad for this witch by the end, though! I mean, why would anyone be so rude to a little old lady?! I thought this was a really good way to play on the old lady persona. She's old, so she can't see that well; she's old, so she is always welcoming to young children and prepares food for them. It's adorable!
Still, the ending is quite sad. She's just a lonely old woman, after all. And you really did an expert job of conveying that to the readers. I was so so sympathetic to her plight, and that's all because of your writing style! I'm so happy I came back to read your final story. Great job!
I enjoyed reading these quite a bit. Each of them was given a fun, clever twist. I also enjoyed the humor that you incorporated, like when the wolf wonders how big people think his stomach is that he would eat so much. I also really liked that you made the three pigs the bad guys. It seems fitting somehow. In fact, along those lines I appreciate the fact that, while you made the three pigs and the hunter bad guys, for the most part you didn’t make good characters bad. Snow White was still a victim, and the kids were bratty and horrid but not evil, and Red was innocent. I liked that that’s how you chose to rewrite the stories. The Snow White tale did a good job of pulling at my heartstrings and making me sad ☹. So did Hansel and Gretel.
ReplyDeleteI have only one suggestion. At the beginning of the first story you introduce yourself even though you introduced yourself in the introduction. You don’t really need to do that. Great job, overall! I liked it:).
It's so interesting to see the villains of the fairy tales get a platform to tell their sides of the story. Adaptations of fairy tales that modernize the stories aren't uncommon, but what is uncommon is providing the villains' perspectives. We seem to take for granted the idea that the big bad wolf is, well, big and bad.
ReplyDeleteI also like how you combined the different stories. The three little pigs are part of the reason why the hunter goes to Red's grandmother's house.
I honestly didn't find much to critique. I think the writing style was great in that it really felt as though the wolf and the "witch" were speaking. Your chapters make it easy to imagine what they must be going through. Overall, I think you have a very strong storybook. It could easily be turned into an actual children's book.